I need the help of anyone into Star Trek

[Crazy Jen]

http://startrek.fanlib.com/fanfic/Quoth_the_Raven/2fqpso

I your help in judging marks entry in this writing assignment. its a short piece but hes looking for some feedback from some fans on what they think about his take on this. You probably have to sign up as a member to vote but it would mean alot to me if you helped me out. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOUR HELP

PS It's the third scene assignment out of four so if you click on the 'script' link it will show you the first two scenes

CRAZY JEN

I owe you

[King Hippos Bandaid]

I have seen Star Trek in Movie and TV form

I can do that "V" thing that spock does with his Hand

:king:

[A.J.]

Cool premise using The Guardian of Forever from probably the best episode in the original Star Trek series, "The City on the Edge of Forever". I wondered why they never used that more often in later series or the movies. (Though they did use it in the animated series).

http://www.stguardian.to/pics/gofbig.jpg

[ChrisTheCop]

I liked it. It left me wanting to read more.
Good premise, good use of existing characters; their actions and words seemed true to Roddenbury's original.

[LiddyRules]

Cool premise using The Guardian of Forever from probably the best episode in the original Star Trek series, "The City on the Edge of Forever". I wondered why they never used that more often in later series or the movies. (Though they did use it in the animated series).
I always wanted them to revive the failed Spinoff Assignment: Earth.

[MadMatt]

I always wanted them to revive the failed Spinoff Assignment: Earth.

Yeah, whatever happened to Gary Seven and the Aegis? And why did they want to protect Earth?

[Tenbatsuzen]

Cool premise using The Guardian of Forever from probably the best episode in the original Star Trek series, "The City on the Edge of Forever". I wondered why they never used that more often in later series or the movies. (Though they did use it in the animated series).

http://www.stguardian.to/pics/gofbig.jpg

They actually used it in of the few non-canon Star Trek books that's actually worth the paper it's printed on, Peter David's Imzadi. It's still a bunch of fanboy wanking tripe, but...

the fact that Riker goes back in time using the Guardian to save Troi is pretty cool, from a romantic standpoint